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Unnecessary Words
Unnecessary words, like
missing words, tend to result from careless proofreading:
I believe
if schools or the government don't step in and do something
about obesity in America today, I think we will be in
trouble.
Including both I believe and
I think in this sentence is repetitious. Leaving either
expression out would result in a clearer sentence:
I believe if schools or
the government don't step in and do something about obesity in
America today, we will be in trouble.
If schools or the government don't step in and
do something about obesity in America today, I think we
will be in trouble.
In fact, some people might argue that
since the sentence is the writer's prediction, not a statement of
fact, both I believe and I think are unnecessary:
If schools or the government
don't step in and do something about obesity in America today,
we will be in trouble.
While we would not mark a sentence
with one unnecessary I think/I believe as an error, papers
are usually more powerful when they do not contain unnecessary
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